Chapter 23 RR

Chapter 23 is about strategies for revising and editing our research paper.  A revision should be viewed as an opportunity to refine a paper and make its thesis clearer.  Only the most arrogant or talented person could believe they could produce a great finished product on the first attempt.  With a 10-12 pg research paper, the need for revision is abundantly clear.

This chapter explores the reasons for revision.

• Revise for audience -  We need to make our tone and word choice be appropriate for the audience we're writing to.
• Revising for Structure and Support - Sometimes the data might need to be rearranged to build towards a more logical progression.
• Revising for Emphasis, Conciseness, and Clarity - We do not always talk in the most efficient manner.  That last sentence could also be restated "We often speak inefficiently."  I said the same thing but used less words.  Less is more.

Finally, editing and proofreading are covered.  It's easy to miss a word when writing a paper because one says it in their mind, but forgets to type it.  Proofreading helps and especially if you can get someone else to proofread it, it would help even more.

Revision seems like a waste of time to many students, who are pressed for time, and who's papers are due at the end of the semester when final exams occur, which need to be studied for.  Because of this, revision can take a back seat to other things.  Having just written a 10 page paper, the last thing a student wants to do is to have to go back and edit it.  Even in the professional world, there are writers and their are editors.  Unfortunately, at the student level, we do not have the luxury of an editor who will take our papers and make them better for us.  We must edit our own work and revise it as needed and this chapter will help us do so.

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Dustan S

Chapters 30 & 32 RR

Before we begin a research paper, we need to do two things: find sources and plan the project.  Chapter 30 is about planning research and Chapter 32 is about finding sources.

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Chapter 30 shows how to turn a topic into a question.  You start with a broad overview, refine it to a topic, and finally develop a specific question.  From that question, you need to determine if it is too broad.  If so, then you narrow it down, but if it becomes too narrow, then you have to broaden it a little.  When questions become too narrow, they become uninteresting because the reader would need to be interested in that very specific topic.  This chapter also talks about how to effectively use search engines and what keywords to use.

No longer are we restricted to just the books in a local library when researching a paper, the internet has broadened our reach, so knowing where to find sources is key.  Chapter 32 is all about that topic and starts out by looking at how to search the internet.  Beyond simple searches you can do through Google, there are peer-reviewed journals that can be queried.

Of course, there is the age old source for research data, the library.  Since libraries contain a wealth of information, one needs to know how to search for the info they need.  This chapter shows how to search a library database as well as describing the various types of resources available in library like encyclopedias, government documents, and bibliographies.

Finally, Chapter 32 discusses field sources such as interviews, observations and questionnaires.  For my paper, this is helpful because I've witnessed some of the things that I'm writing about.  I know how it made me feel and my own thoughts on the subject and I don't have to rely on someone else asking the right question to the right person.

Overall, both chapters would help writers write better papers.  In this day and age, we are all used to using Google to search for something we are interested in, but we need to discern which sources are scholarly and which are not.  There are also some things in the library that I wasn't aware of like bibliographies.  Those kinds of resources can give an idea of where to begin looking for sources for our research paper.

Dustan S

Chapter 35 RR

Chapter 35 is a short chapter that discusses how to write a research paper.  It's helpful since a large portion of our grade depends on our research paper, so we need to learn how to write one correctly.

There are two ways to start a paper, the Thesis Method and the Answer Method.  The Thesis Method begins with a plan and thesis, building supporting points to make your point clear.  This is the way we are being taught how to write the paper.  The second method is the Answer Method.  It lets you just jump in and start writing.  You'll line up evidence and discover your point as you go.  This method requires more revising.  I like a plan, so the first method seems better to me.

The rest of the chapter talks about how to begin, end, and edit your paper.  It says "you might start out slowly with a clear account of an event to draw your readers into the paper."  I don't know if that's great advice though, because if you don't start out strongly, the reader might get bored and not even finish reading.

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Dustan S

3 best success of my paper

My success on research paper is my introduction. In my introduction I talk about the responsibility of an animal, law and who are being affected by this act. It is my most successful paragraph in my research paper. After my successful introduction paragraph, my body paragraph is the most successful because In my body paragraph I touch on dogs, cats, orcas, and other animals that are being used for sports and entertainment. Lastly my most success on my paper would be the MLA origination because I learned the MLA format from my English 122 class book.

Nirakaran B. Malla

3 best successes

 After receiving my research paper back I noticed that this time I did a pretty good job with my work citations page, it's in correct format, it's in alphabetical order and it's the correct amount of citations needed. Another good thing about my research paper was my introduction, my thesis is clear and my audience is able to find my F.P. The last success of my research paper is that I am now using in text citations correctly. I still need to improve in all these areas but, they are a lot better now compared to my first essays.


-Yazmin Olvera

3 Things Jenn Will Like

My research paper is about the Flint Water Crisis.  I'm going to examine the socioeconomic history of Flint and see how this developed and what's in store for the future.  The three things that I think she will like are:

1) The Title - "Water we going to do about Flint's water?"
This is a play on words where I'm substituting "Water" for "What are" because they sound similar when you say them out loud.  Jenn is a writer and I think she appreciates puns or clever use of words, so she will like the title.

2) First Hand Info
I've worked in the water purification industry for 10 years and as part of my job, I get to travel to our locations all across the country.  They are typically in poor places with terrible tap water.  Some places have water that comes out of the tap like tea or smells like sewage.  Flint generates the headlines, but there are other places like it that also have terrible tap water, and having seen it first-hand, I should be able to give witness to the conditions there.

3) Details about the health effects on children
I don't know for sure that Jenn loves children, but the fact that they are innocent and trusting and the effects of lead-poisoning are more pronounced on kids is heartbreaking.  The story has been in the headlines, so maybe she has some curiosity about the topic already.

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Dustan S

Chapter 35 Response

In this chapter they teach methods on writing and drafting a research paper. They also give advise on using your sources to support your ideas. For example, to write a thesis their method is to start with putting together all the information you found in one sentence. It is also the main point or argument that is the basis of your paper. Revising and editing section stood out the most because I have hard time changing the sentences because it changes the meaning of the sentence in two different ways but in this section  their advise is to organization, strengthen your evidence and if that does not work then drop a section and add a new one. This was helpful and I will use this method on my research paper.

Nirakaran B. Malla

Chapter 23

In this chapter the author focuses on the revising part of writing an essay. The thing that stood out to me the most was that you can revise at any point of your writing. While growing up and going to school teachers always tell you to write your first draft and THEN you can scribble all over it and revise it. When in reality you revise all the time. When you think of an idea and think of it in many different ways you are already revising that thought. What was helpful was that you can start off with just revising your thesis and making sure you are getting to the freaking point. After revising your thesis you can revise one sentence at a time until you have revised your essay as a whole. The revision checklist makes sure you ask yourself the important questions and are able to answer your research question clearly.
-Yazmin olvera

Chapter 35

While reading this chapter, helpful tips from chapters 30 & 32 come back to mind.
This chapter focuses on the whole idea of writing the research paper, from thinking of a topic, to looking for the research information, coming up with an answer, and putting it all together and organized in one essay. Again, the checklists for revising and proof reading your essay are always extremely helpful when I apply them to my own writing.
This chapter was just another refresher to what we read in chapter 30 and 32.

-Yazmin olvera

Chapter 30 & 32

In chapter 30 what stuck out to me the most was that the author included steps you should take when having to write a research paper. I thought a research paper was like any other essay assignment just with more work to do with it, but the steps were very helpful! The steps make sure you stay organized and finish everything on time. One thing that surprised me was that the author tells you to take a stand on your topic and do research that backs up your stand, I had in mind that with a research paper you must always have unbiased information. This chapter helped a lot while working on my own research paper through the planing and organizing stage.
In chapter 32 the author refreshed our minds by pointing out how to do research using websites, and trying to find information in a book at the library. The tips that always help me with my own writing with these chapters are always the checklists the author provides.

-Yazmin olvera

Reading Assingment Chapter 30 & 32

Chapter 30 is about writing a research paper. In this chapter there is a process which will help you on your research paper and it also help to choose the right research topic. First step starts with engage by exploring the topic. Second step is Inquire where you research and state your question. Third step is organize, fourth step is investigate; fifth step is research and the 6th step is Synthesize. These are the process on writing a research paper. From this chapter the process of writing a research paper was intriguing.
Similar to chapter 30, In chapter 31 they guide you on finding sources. When finding sources, it is always a good idea to use search engines that is provided by school because it superior and accurate on finding information about the topic you research on. For example, my school provides ESBCO. I used this when I want to find information about the topic I want to research on so that I can use in my paper for support/ evidence. First chapter helps you with your research process while the second chapter teaches about using sources to make your essay stronger.
Nirakaran B. Malla

Outline for research paper

Introduction

Immigration needs to be reformed for illegal immigrants that are already living in the United States.

Those already in the United States have built their entire lives here and for most cases the only law they have broken is coming in or staying illegally.


Stay united with their families


Get a proper education and health care


Keep their jobs


Younger workforce


Boost the nation’s economy

Body paragraphs

Stay united with their families

Topic sentence: 1 in every 4 children in the United States today live with undocumented parents or guardians.

18.4 million Children are living in fear of being separated from their loved ones due to deportations.




1. In 2014 there were 315,943 deportations. That is 315,943 families being torn apart and devastated. (http://www.statisticbrain.com/number-of-u-s-deportations/)

Get a proper education and health care

Topic sentence: The absence of a social security number prevents illegal immigrants from getting proper health care.

1. Every individual trying to buy health insurance needs to present a SSN, without a SSN an individual is not able to purchase a major medical insurance. (http://www.bernardhealth.com/woofstreetjournal/bid/199561/Need-healthcare-but-don-t-have-a-social-security-number)


Unable to apply for any government assistance like Medicaid, Medicare, food stamps, etc..

Keep their jobs

Topic sentence: Those who have come in illegally or have stayed illegally in the United States have built their entire lives here, including the jobs they obtain.

1. In 2010, 41.5% of the workforce in the United States was held by foreign-born people. But that is the majority of labor work jobs. (http://www.brookings.edu/research/papers/2012/03/15-immigrant-workers-singer)


Most immigrants say they come to the United States to provide a better living for their families. By keeping their jobs the illegal immigrants would be able to keep providing for their families.

Younger workforce

Topic sentence: 　The population pyramid in the United States is slightly unbalanced. Having the larger portion of population in the age ranges of 20-24 years old.

1. In the future the ratio of the people in the retirement stage of their lives compared to the people young enough to be in the workforce is going to increase creating problems with social security benefits. (http://benefitof.net/benefits-of-immigration/)

2. Technology is now taking over most old fashioned methods, making young people highly qualified for most jobs. Younger people have grown up with technology around them and have not had to adapt to it like older generations due to the fact that they were born around the same era as technology was.

E. Boost the nation’s economy

Topic sentence: --------

1. Having more people means there are going to be people with high education backgrounds and those with lower education backgrounds dividing jobs like cooks, architects, and accountants with those with higher education backgrounds. And food preps, construction workers, and housekeepers with those with lower education backgrounds. Creating more jobs. 　(http://clas.berkeley.edu/research/immigration-economic-benefits-immigration)




2. Immigrants are 30% more likely to start a small business here in the United States than citizens. Small business like restaurants, creating more jobs and contributing to the economy. (https://www.whitehouse.gov/blog/2012/07/12/ten-ways-immigrants-help-build-and-strengthen-our-economy) 　　　

III. Conclusion

Immigration needs to be reformed for illegal immigrants that are already living in the United States in order for them to continue the lives they have worked hard to build for the past couple of years.

　　　

-Yazmin Olvera

LSD.

MDMA.

Psilocybin.

These three compounds undoubtedly evoke some kind of emotion when read. More often than not, that response is negative and subjective. Perhaps this is in response to the deliberate and widespread case of classical conditioning that started in the late 1980’s and endowed to the American youth by our government. Or, maybe the Urban Legends that surround these substances had a lasting impact. Regardless of why you think the way you do, we shouldn't continue to gobble up the anti-drug rhetoric and accept the “just say no” model so blindly. Instead, compounds such as LSD, MDMA, and Psilocybin should be given an objective and academic opportunity to pursue medicinal legitimacy. Fear of the unknown can no longer be an accepted response. Instead, acceptance of the exploratory nature of these compounds can allow for open and honest psychotherapy sessions. As well, they hold a vast potentiality to garnish tangible responses for those afflicted by PTSD, end of life sufferers, the socially anxious, addicts of all kinds, and even in couples therapy. Also, if accepted by society (as well as legislatures), will the Veteran’s Administration (they treat the lion's share of PTSD patients in America) adopt this therapeutic model?

WHY?

The reasons why we think the way we do about LSD, MDMA, and Psilocybin are to be questioned in the essay as well. Whether it was War on Drugs legislature, confusing commercials with broken eggs,or even just second or third hand anecdotes. The reason why is because the American society was force fed an anti-drug perception. These compounds are now proven to be potentially very useful both medically and therapeutically.

WHY NOT?

This is a topic that should live in the grey area, not camp on the black side with the “drop outs”, or sitting on the white side throwing judgments at anyone in opposition. With institutions such as the Multidisciplinary Association for Psychedelic Studies leading the way, or even work done by outlying Ethnobotanists such as the McKenna brothers, these compounds should not always carry an obligatory “illicit” connotation. Long term placebo controlled double blind studies have been conducted, and have concluded that these compounds can indeed alleviate suffering for PTSD patients, those struggling with the end of life process, anxiety sufferers, and couples going through some sort of rough patch.

Psychopharmacology.

Ethnopharmacology.

Psychotherapy.

These are the vehicles the 3 substances can be utilized through to lead them down the path to societal acceptance and medical legitimacy. Like succeeding in any ambitious endeavor, the devil is in the details. That being said, the biggest hurdle will be the restructuring of how everyday Americans view LSD, MDMA, and Psilocybin.

-DL Bell

Research

Animal Cruelty

Intro- Animal cruelty is when someone hurts an animal or does not care for an animal responsibility, like not giving a dog or cat food and water. It is against the law to be cruel to or harm animals, even your own pets. It's also called animal abuse.

Thesis- Animal cruelty is affecting animals and humans while animals are getting hurt physically while we are being hurt physically.

Body paragraph- I am using the information about the criminal underground world of dogs fighting for first paragraph. This paragraph going to cover how they are raised and the drugs they are given for the fight. 

Support- They are raised in complete isolation and spend most of their lives on short heavy chains. They are also given steroids to increase muscle mass for fighting and making them aggressive. I will add more information about other animals that are being abuse on my rough draft. 

2nd paragraph- In this paragraph I will answer to question; who abuses animals, other animals and where is this event taking place in the world and how are they treating the animals. 

Support- The animals that are most common by their statistics are dogs, cats, horses and rooster.“The U.S. Drug Enforcement Agency has prosecuted multiple cases where drug cartels were running narcotics through cockfighting and dog fighting operations. In 2014, federal agents found that international drug dealers had congregated at a Kentucky cockfighting pit and even sent a hit man to target a local cockfight.”

3rd body paragraph-In this paragraph I am going to talk about the affect animal cruelty has over family. In this source I found that animal abuse affects both animal and humans. 

Support- Professor Frank Ascione of the University Of Denver Graduate School Of Social Work says, “The research is pretty clear that there are connections between animal abuse and domestic violence and child abuse.”(13)

Restate thesis/ Conclusion - Animal cruelty is not only affecting animals but also humans because of their behavior towards animal, their children will learn and pick up their parents action which is affecting them and their future. 

Nirakaran B. Malla

Chapter 12 RR

Source

They say that a house is only as good as it's foundation.  It doesn't make sense to build a magnificent house on a poor foundation.

Similarly, a position paper needs strong supporting sources in order to give the paper credibility.  A research paper takes the reader through an analytical journey that starts with a point, examines the counterpoint, and goes through a logical presentation of points that support the thesis statement and derive from credible sources.


Chapter 12 shows us how to take a source and integrate its idea into our paper.  We do not want to plagiarize information, but we do want to quote or paraphrase source data.  This chapter teaches us how to do that by "learning by writing."  For example, on pgs 236-237, it presents an excerpt from a source text and shows how to properly quote it.  They show an example of too much quotation and the proper amount.

I like the way this chapter presents the info because in other textbooks, they tell you how to do something, but don't provide useful examples.  There are plenty of visual examples, so a student writer could improve a lot if they followed their advice.  This class is centered around being able to properly produce a well-researched and documented research paper, so the skills taught in chapter 12 should help throughout a person's career.

Dustan S

Chapter 12

In chapter 12 it talks about supporting a position with sources. When reading chapter 12, learning from other writers was not very helpful for myself because last time when I read their essays, it only made me confusing about their format and their point of view. However, the section about citing your work cited gave me examples on citing sources and the sources should be in alphabetical order. which I will be using in my future essays. Another section about supporting my position with sources gives ideas on how to use my sources to my advantage. I found this helpful and will use in future essays. Chapter 12 takes you into another level of supporting your position with sources and citing your sources. 

Nirakaran B. Malla 

Intro to Prospectus

                                                     War On Drugs 

I would like to research and write about War on Drugs. 

Drugs have dragged down people from their potentials. It is something I am interested in and want to write my point on view on. 

Drugs have caused many people to loose their life and their loved one's because their addiction for this chemical. 

Nirakaran B. Malla

Clean Water

     The recent crisis in Flint, MI with lead in their water has brought the safety of public water to the nation's attention.  However, I work in the water purification industry and I know that Flint's water is not an isolated problem in our country.  I know that my company would like to jump in to help them out by supplying clean drinking water, but we've been unable to do so because of all of the permitting and bureaucratic paperwork that any company would need to go through to open a business that is selling a food product.  I would love to know more about the Flint situation and what is really needed to start selling clean drinking water there.  Here's my cluster diagram:

Dustan S

 One of the topics I would like to write about for the research paper is immigration reform.
This topic has impacted my life in many ways and it's something I am very passionate about. I would love to learn more about the issue and provide the knowledge I already learned in the past throughout this paper.
My potential thesis statement is;
Immigration has been a "hot topic" for years now, and it's an issue that needs to be addressed and changed.
-Yazmin Olvera

Chapter 21 response

For this week we read chapter 21. In this chapter, I found tips on writing an opening sentence. The section about writing an opening sentence helped me a lot because it gave variety of ways I can write an opening sentence. For example: starting a sentence with a thesis statement, sticking to what is relevant and not to forget to write a topic. I learned that you should not spend your time on opening but should write simple and clear. I can also begin with a story. This chapter is connected to chapter 20 because they talk about similar things like writing opening sentences, and ending with thesis. After reading these two chapters, I am able to write my essay much better and staying on topic.    

Nirakaran B. Malla

Chapter 20

When reading this chapter I learn several ideas to make my thesis stronger .The part that stand out the most was How to discover a working thesis. In my essay, I always had problem with thesis. It was always the hardest part of my essay. I kept on coming with several thesis but not one of them was good. After reading this paragraph I start to used working thesis and don't have to waste my time thinking about how to perfect it and focus more on body paragraph and my view point.

This chapter does a great job giving ideas to make a thesis stronger. It gives examples, ideas to help my thesis get stronger.

Nirakaran B. Malla

Stand Essay

In the stand essay, my topic is about climate change is caused by man made or natural?.

Substantiation: In this part, I argue that climate change is not man made and it is just the cycle of earth.

Evaluation: Global warming is not man made because the Statics shows most of the CO2 is coming from natural activities like Volcano and oceans biological activity.
  
Policy: In my essay, I approach my readers as finding the facts about global warming through research rather than building our side by just knowing the facts, media, news and other resources provide.

Ethos: I use Ethos in my essay by giving fact the media provide for us to build our side.

Logos: I use logical view on my essay about where most of the CO2 are coming from.

Nirakaran B. Malla

Reading Response chapter 21

In chapter twenty one, the things that stuck out the most to me was the helpful suggestions made on if a writer ever gets stuck trying to start an essay. Specially because personally English is my least favorite subject and only because I struggle with it the most. Starting an essay and coming up with an opening sentence is difficult for me for some reason I hope the suggestions made in this chapter help me with my next essay.

The part that I feel needs a little more detail and explanation is when the writer says to include in your conclusion a topic sentence towards the end. I think it is very easy to make the topic sentence at the end of your conclusion sound like you are going to start another essay, or if you left a thought unfinished.


-Yazmin Olvera

Taking a Stand Essay

 Evaluation: Keeping abortion legal in the United States

Substantiation: By keeping abortion legal, it minimizes the problem of illegal and unsafe abortion procedures, and helps minimize the number of children being abused and harmed everyday while living with unhappy families. 

Policy: Citing multiple statistics of how many pregnancies in the US are unplanned and how many turn to abortion every year. By providing those numbers it emphasizes the number of women that would turn to unsafe and illegal abortion procedures if the law changed. 

For logos I used statistics to prove the mass amount of abortions each year making the audience see that many people turn to this solution a high percentage of the time.

For ethos I used the citations of multiple credible websites, bringing in numbers from as current as 2015.

For pathos I suggested the audience to imagine being in a similar spot during the introduction, and see the situation from a different point of view, bringing out the emotion in the audience.


- Yazmin O

Reading Response Chapter 20

In chapter 20 the thing that stuck out to me the most was the tips and advice given when working on your thesis statement. I myself have always struggled with writing essays and specially with coming up with a  good thesis statement. I find that I still struggle trying to come up with thesis statements for essays but with following the tips in chapter 20 I hope I get better.

While writing this essay I asked myself the three questions on page 408 "Could I define or state my topic more clearly?" "Could I define or state my slant more clearly?" "Could I limit my thesis to develop it more successfully?" I ended up writing multiple thesis statements and wasn't able to narrow it down to the "best" one, so I skipped over the thesis and worked on the rest of the essay. Towards the conclusion I reworded it to best fit the thesis and went off with that.
Chapter 20 had many great tips in order to construct a good thesis statement, It did an excellent job.

Yazmin O.

Chapter 20 RR

Thesis statements are hard - Too General
Writing a thesis statement is hard - More Specific
Finding a way to properly state your thesis so that it takes a stand on a debatable issue and allows others to oppose is hard to articulate properly - Specific Stand

Source

I just showed how to take an idea and refine it so that it becomes a good thesis statement.  The thought from the original idea is retained but the final one clearly states a position that a person can agree or disagree with.  Once the thesis statement is fully articulated, it helps the writer lay out the supporting evidence and build a logical argument for why they feel the way they stated in their thesis statement.  Chapter 20 is helpful in guiding a writer through this process.

I thought this chapter was important because an essay must begin with a proper thesis statement.  It showed how to build a strong thesis.  When writing about a topic, it is easy to be tempted into trying to cover all aspects of the issue.  Since we are typically given 3-5 page limits, what results is a paper that shallowly covers many points, but doesn't really make the point the author intended.  This is a sign that the thesis was too broad or unclear.

I am the kind of person that loves practical, actionable advice.  Broad advice like "pick a good topic" or "Make your thesis strong" do not give a writer detailed advice on how to achieve those goals.  The Bedford Guide for College Readers is great because it doesn't stop with broad advice.  It gives specific tips and step-by-step instructions on how to achieve the things you should do.  Visuals like flow charts, marked up examples and tables listing common problems and solutions are fantastic.  If a writer read this book and truly followed the instructions, they could not help but become a much more effective author.

Dustan S

Strategies for Stating and Planning a Thesis- Ch.20

In the process of writing an position essay (Taking A Stand), structure is key. To begin, Stating + Planning a Thesis- I wrote several instead of just one or two. As the book stated, I did this to shape my topic for my purpose + audience.

After writing around 10 or so potential thesis statements, I narrowed it down to the two I liked the best. These were: Living wage v. Market value wage and Standard Federal Wage v. Power to the States to regulate. Of these two selections, I selected the former.

Source

I began to write a couple possible ways to word my thesis. I then wrote it, after so I used it (just as the book suggested) to help organize my essay.

Chapter 20 does a great job in laying the framework on ‘thesis writing.

-Daniel Bell

In the Taking A Stand essay, my topic is an argument for a living wage Federal minimum v. the current “market value” wage.

Substantiation- This part of the essay is when I lay out the facts concerning the Federal Minimum Wage history and current law.

Evaluation- Here, is a use of a comparative statement between “crumbling local businesses” and that the raise “will inflate local economies and raise the quality of life for millions of Americans.”

Policy-  Cited is a study conducted by UC-Berkeley in which data collected over 20 years concludes that in cities where the minimum wage is raised over 80%, jobs were not lost, but in the private sector grew on average, and local businesses offset the biggest “new costs” by keeping workers on the payroll and happy to work.

Source

Ethos- Brought up is FDR’s signing of the Fair Labor and Standards Act of 1938, as well supporting facts surrounding the current states of affairs when it comes to American lower middle-class life.

Pathos- A comparison is made between how a living wage looks for a family of 3 v. a life for that family living on $7.25/hour to incite emotions when the audience reads this part.

Logos- To add weight to the argument, such statements as “personal finances were much less complex in 1938 than they are today.” Also, that 40% of Americans make less than the 1968 Federal Minimum Wage.

-Daniel Bell

Take a stand workshop

In my paper, I tried to formulate the argument in this order: Ethos, Pathos, then Logos.  I established the Bible as the authority right up front because my later reasoning, Pathos, depended on passages found within the Bible.  I built a logical argument that defended my point.  Finally, I tried to use Ethos in the end to appeal to the reader's emotions.  I could do a better job there.

My substantiation claims involved summarizing the case that made abortion legal for women in all circumstances in the US, Roe v Wade.  I clearly defined what a human being is according to the Bible and discussed when life began.

My evaluation claims are the bulk of my essay.  It mostly deals with the question of whether the Bible condemns abortion.  I deal with the moral question of whether abortion is murder and also whether impeding another person's free will is wrong.

My policy claims are that the government or other people should not force a woman to give birth against her will.  I was going to limit it to first trimester abortions that Roe v Wade dealt with and should probably refine it so that my limits are clear.

Dustan S

Does this look like a human to you?

Chapter 9

In chapter 9 this week reading I notice the section that talked about taking a stand because when I have to state my opinion and choose a side I always lack to support one side. I am always in the middle because both sides provide evidence to support their sides. I am learning to find more supporting ideas to support my essay so that readers are interested in what I am trying to deliver. Another section that stand out the most was select evidence to support your position. In this section you need to have three supporting passage. First beginning with what happened followed by what is right and what should be done. This is my first time where I learned that your support should answer these question. To me this seems similar to following the rubric of an essay where you start with topic sentence, body paragraph and conclusion. I will support my evidence in this order so it is easier to understand to the reader.

                                                                                                                          Nirakaran B. Malla 

Discovery Checklist

What issue or controversy concerns you?

Abortion debate in the USA

Source

What current debate engages you?

Does the Bible forbid abortion?

What position do you want to take?

If a woman wants to, she should be able to have an abortion.

How can you state your stand?

The Bible does not forbid abortion.

What evidence might you need to support it?

Bible verses that make my point.  Maybe include behavioral economics data.

How might you refine your working thesis?

My thesis would change to “God believes that a woman should have the right to choose whether or not to have an abortion. ”

How could you make statements more accurate, definitions clearer, or categories more exact?

I would define the difference between a human being and a human body.  I would draw a distinction between early and late term abortions.  I would also use direct Bible quotes rather than paraphrasing.

What assumptions are you making?

I assume that the reader has been exposed to the nomenclature of Biblical references.  I also assume that they believe that the Bible does forbid legal abortion because I’ve never heard anyone advance my opinion.  Conservatives have always advanced the notion that a person’s life begins at conception even though there is nowhere in the Bible that explicitly states that.

What clarification of or support for these assumptions might your audience need?

I’ll include references to the internet links for the Bible references.  To refute the typical Conservative argument, I’ll use the Bible, which they respect to clarify some ideas and to discuss God’s fundamental values.

How might you qualify your thesis?
I’d limit it by pregnancy length and situation

What exceptions should you note?

Late term abortions, Mothers that would die if they gave birth, and stillborns

What other views might you want to recognize?

Traditional Christian objections

Dustan S

Discovery Checklist

Issue

The issue that concerns me is global warming. Big industries believe it is the cycle of the earth.

Positon

The positon I want to take is to stop deforestation and bring the nature to its course. In Colorado, last year I felt there was more snow than this year. Last year we had at least four snow week but this year only two. Leonardo DiCaprio went to top of the Canada to find snow to film his movie the Revenant. This show, global warming is real and because of deforestation it is effecting our way of life.

Thesis

Globalization is real and happening because of the value money has in our life; that people are cutting trees to sell in order to get money eventually leads to deforestation and global warming. In order to make my thesis better I will use different words same meaning to shorten the thesis and clear to understand.

Support

In order to make my readers believe in globalization, I will use our state as an example to help me support my argument. To support my thesis I will use example like the amazon forest, climate change (higher temperature than before), and natural disaster.

View

The other side of this argument could be that it is a cycle of the earth. Which could be true but what about the animal habitat that are changing drastically every year including us.

                                                                                                                                  Nirakaran B. Malla

ESSAY 1

The Issue

I am going to address the topic of minimum wage set to a living wage versus market driven wages. The current debate is between the legislators of the 114th Congress and people like myself who live paycheck to paycheck.

My Position

I’m in favor of a gradual increase for all minimum wage employees, of which reflects the median income for the specific zip code the worker resides in. Use of the cost of living model versus a flat rate for everyone poses a number of questions, but also brings answers to quite a few. Currently, the U.S. Military has a system in place (for housing allotments the recruiters receive all around the country) that addresses my argument. As well, I plan to highlight some misgivings served to the American workers and even some blatant lies told to us by elected officials.

Refining Ideas

My use of primary sourced data as well as peer-reviewed articles will make clearer my point. History, even economically, does indeed repeat itself.

Preconceived Notions

As most of my readers will agree, the corporate constant growth model does not “trickle down” to average rank and file employees like our government promised us it would. I have been on this planet long enough to know that paying workers poverty incomes doesn’t demonstrate sound economic policy, but highlights a propensity for greed.

Support

To qualify my potential revisions to current wages, I will use examples of other nations’ economic policies’, cite scientific studies, I’ll maybe even use some anecdotal evidence or quotes to further illustrate my point.

Refutation

To bring weight to the argument, I will also address the most popular counterarguments as well as the rampant case of Congressional Cognitive Dissonance that currently has the Hill in its’ grips.  

-Daniel Bell